Hi, dear mystery author, It really bothered me that there was no comments on your story (as of yet) and decided to read it despite the fact that I don't like Holmescest (I'm not quite sure why, and I've been pondering the question for a few days now, and I can't quite put my finger on it. But I do think that this pairing makes sense on paper… as in I can see Sherlock with someone like Mycroft and vice versa. Anyway, I won't bore you with my ramblings, because I don't think I actually have a point to make except that I've been thinking a lot.)
Anyway, I enjoyed your first chapter. You are clearly a very talented writer and storyteller. I liked how you set up the story; going back and forth between events of the past and present. I'm still learning the craft of writing and that's one thing I struggle with; showing the reader what happened in the past without writing 3000 words of exposition.
I also enjoyed your plot. It's clever, atmospheric, and original. Mycroft and Sherlock's portrayal rang true.
Now, for some specifics… I really like the idea that Mycroft took violin lessons when he was young. It seems so plausible and I quite like the mental image of Mycroft with a violin in hand.
I also enjoyed Mr Talbot's words of wisdom.
The sex between the brothers was well written and loving ( It still felt weird to read though… again not sure why exactly.) I was extremely intrigued as to what Billy the servant's role was in this context. Mycroft usually lets him watch?
I haven't read the rest of the story yet, but I'm extremely happy I don't need to wait and can just go ahead and read the next chapter. It's very late here, so it won't happen until tomorrow.
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Date: 2015-12-17 05:11 am (UTC)It really bothered me that there was no comments on your story (as of yet) and decided to read it despite the fact that I don't like Holmescest (I'm not quite sure why, and I've been pondering the question for a few days now, and I can't quite put my finger on it. But I do think that this pairing makes sense on paper… as in I can see Sherlock with someone like Mycroft and vice versa. Anyway, I won't bore you with my ramblings, because I don't think I actually have a point to make except that I've been thinking a lot.)
Anyway, I enjoyed your first chapter. You are clearly a very talented writer and storyteller.
I liked how you set up the story; going back and forth between events of the past and present. I'm still learning the craft of writing and that's one thing I struggle with; showing the reader what happened in the past without writing 3000 words of exposition.
I also enjoyed your plot. It's clever, atmospheric, and original. Mycroft and Sherlock's portrayal rang true.
Now, for some specifics… I really like the idea that Mycroft took violin lessons when he was young. It seems so plausible and I quite like the mental image of Mycroft with a violin in hand.
I also enjoyed Mr Talbot's words of wisdom.
The sex between the brothers was well written and loving ( It still felt weird to read though… again not sure why exactly.) I was extremely intrigued as to what Billy the servant's role was in this context. Mycroft usually lets him watch?
I haven't read the rest of the story yet, but I'm extremely happy I don't need to wait and can just go ahead and read the next chapter. It's very late here, so it won't happen until tomorrow.
Really good job, mystery author!
More in the next few days,
OpalJade.